I am looking for part 3! Your comments, especially about the lack of drama at the end, were on point. It's a good story, it could have more bite. You would certainly write it differently today, with a little more oomph about why it stuck in the narrator's head.
This is terrific! Love the way you dissect your story with cold eye of time and experience. When I get time, I'm going to dig out one of my old lit fiction stories (written before I took up crime) and go through it like this. Your post is a great model for doing that.
I am looking for part 3! Your comments, especially about the lack of drama at the end, were on point. It's a good story, it could have more bite. You would certainly write it differently today, with a little more oomph about why it stuck in the narrator's head.
This is terrific! Love the way you dissect your story with cold eye of time and experience. When I get time, I'm going to dig out one of my old lit fiction stories (written before I took up crime) and go through it like this. Your post is a great model for doing that.